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Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by cousinvinny13 » Sun Aug 09, 2020 10:07 am

Hi there - I'm wondering if anyone here with Yale 250 experience (Yale admits, admissions folks) would be able to take a peek at a draft. It's a bit unorthodox, so I'm just interested in testing whether the concept works.

Any takers? I'll figure out how to use the private message feature if so...

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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by icechicken » Sun Aug 09, 2020 4:11 pm

cousinvinny13 wrote:
Sun Aug 09, 2020 10:07 am
unorthodox
Back in the days of Dean Asha's blog, she recommended against this, depending on what you mean by "unorthodox". And they've since narrowed the prompt somewhat, suggesting they wanted to weed out some of the more creative-writing-y 250 submissions they'd been getting.

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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by cousinvinny13 » Sun Aug 09, 2020 4:47 pm

So do you interpret the new Yale 250 guidance as an invitation to make some type of an argument?

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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by icechicken » Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:31 pm

cousinvinny13 wrote:
Sun Aug 09, 2020 4:47 pm
So do you interpret the new Yale 250 guidance as an invitation to make some type of an argument?
That's not how I read it, although an argument of some kind could be a good fulcrum for a 250. Certainly a lot of successful 250's work that way. I think KENYADIGGIT's is up somewhere around this site, and it's just a solid "Here's an controversy, here's my position on it and here's why" piece of writing.

Last year's prompt does ask, though, that you write about an "idea or issue." You don't have to argue for one side or the other, but in order to intelligently discuss an idea or issue one must demonstrate a grasp of the stuff that might go into an argument: what people's (yours or others') beliefs are, how they arrived at those stances, what the implications of XYZ concept are, etc. Remains to be seen if they alter the prompt again for 2020-21.

I'll have more specific feedback in response to your PM.

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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by KENYADIGG1T » Wed Aug 12, 2020 11:29 pm

icechicken wrote:
Sun Aug 09, 2020 5:31 pm
cousinvinny13 wrote:
Sun Aug 09, 2020 4:47 pm
So do you interpret the new Yale 250 guidance as an invitation to make some type of an argument?
That's not how I read it, although an argument of some kind could be a good fulcrum for a 250. Certainly a lot of successful 250's work that way. I think KENYADIGGIT's is up somewhere around this site, and it's just a solid "Here's an controversy, here's my position on it and here's why" piece of writing.

Last year's prompt does ask, though, that you write about an "idea or issue." You don't have to argue for one side or the other, but in order to intelligently discuss an idea or issue one must demonstrate a grasp of the stuff that might go into an argument: what people's (yours or others') beliefs are, how they arrived at those stances, what the implications of XYZ concept are, etc. Remains to be seen if they alter the prompt again for 2020-21.

I'll have more specific feedback in response to your PM.
I have been summoned!

If you can't find my 250, PM me and I'm more than happy to send it.

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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by cousinvinny13 » Tue Aug 25, 2020 5:25 pm

So, this has gone through several different iterations, but wanted to share one with the wider world.

For context, my resume will establish that I studied history of science and medicine in undergrad, statistics in grad school, and I currently work as a data analyst in the criminal justice field.
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Re: Yale 250 Proof of Concept

Post by pancakes3 » Wed Aug 26, 2020 2:19 pm

- maybe more context for that statement, i.e. what the Probation reform meeting does, policies up for debate, so we have a reference as to the consequences of letting that quackery slide
- conclusion needs work.

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